Spitfire

Here I go again! :D I really like where this is going! The beggining was really good, but now that we see a goal in the story, it's so much ...

Wow, that was really good! For me, actually, my first thought was to the Jet Li movie called Unleashed, too :lol: . The fact that the narrator talks about the ...

Wow, you really caught my curiosity with your chapter! It's really good, although you basically don't know anything yet. I'm pretty sure a lot of people could get hung up ...

Thanks for the reviews guys! As for the Twilight thing, it might seem similar now, but it definitely isn't. I don't want a repeat of that! I enjoyed the books, ...

All righty then. Your story really got me hooked. I like the way you described the scenery, making us wonder about it, intriguing us. The way everything came to be ...

First one to reply, yay!... So the story is definitely gruesome, not something fun to read about, but somewhat realistic. You hear a lot about stuff like this happening, unfortunately. ...

Haha I love the part where Dreico punishes the raper-guy! If he really existed, you go! Getting serious though, I really like the chapter. Although, as Evi said, this sentence ...

Okay then, so here I go. Like Leza said, it might be a good idea to separate the story into a bit more of paragraphs, 'cause it might seem really ...

Chapter 1 Fallen leaves scattered to the winds as I ran, my sneakers slapping hard onto the ground. My face was getting chilled and my hair messy from the cold ...

Oh wow, this prologue was good! When I started reading I thought it might be a really long and complicated story, but it was easily understandable really. I like the ...

Okay, well thanks for PM-ing me... Again, I liked the way you described things, it seemed natural, like you could really see what was hapenning. It's good to know more ...

Good to know. Sometimes I get mixed up in all of this. Thanks for the info!

So hey there Durriedog! I have to say, the story seems real interesting. You describe the scenery well, easy for people to imagine. The only thing though is I don't ...

OOh, this is good. It seems like the kind of thing I'd see in a bookstore and would make me want to buy the book. The way you described it, ...

Ha! Really good story! It's started out a bit confusing, but got more and more interesting the further I read on... I love the characters. The main character is easy ...