Stevie

I have to agree with ShadowTwit when it comes to how spooky this piece is... But I liked it. The Good Things: - Well written, it got a little confusing ...

Really all I have to say is good, though there are a few things that can be added but not for lack of a great writer. The Good Things: - ...

Ummm... Very Interesting. I liked it overall good plot, characters need a little work I'd like to read a little more about them. A little background info would be nice ...

I got to say Awesome story, but (yes I know the terrible but) it's very ordinary, well your main character is at times. I mean I've read so many stories ...

OK Let me talk to you about paragraphs. When someone new talks, you don't write it like this: "blah blah blah," Said person number one. "Blah blah blah," said person ...