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  • General Articles Re: Mirror Trick

    Overall I think this was pretty good, the general idea of a magician and mirrors was a great imagery, and this was all something that I could totally relate to. ...

    Aug 22, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Sleep

    This really hit home with me because I know how much I would miss my dad were something to happen to him. This was a really emotional story, and while ...

    Aug 21, 2010
  • Other Poetry Re: Butterflies

    *Liked This was very strong emotionally. When I was first reading, I thought, "Oh, a cute little poem about a butterfly." I was surprised by the depth of the idea, ...

    Aug 21, 2010
  • Other Poetry Re: Sirens' Songs

    I agree with the first reviewer, I don't like how you put (of time) in the first stanza. I think you could find a more clever way of portraying what ...

    Aug 21, 2010
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Always a Brother

    Thanks simplycomplex, I always find your advice really helpful. :)

    Aug 21, 2010
  • General Fiction Novels Re: Forever Forgotten - Chapter One

    This was a pretty good start, but I think you could have reached out to us even further, finding a way for us to really understand and sympathize with your ...

    Aug 21, 2010
  • Lyric Poetry Re: finish me off

    Like somebody already pointed out, really direct which adds a lot of power to what you're writing, but can also cause you to lose depth in other areas. This wasn't ...

    Aug 21, 2010
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Always a Brother

    A poem about my autistic little brother, who I fail to understand but will never stop trying to relate to. Dear brother, I don't tell you enough what you need ...

    Aug 21, 2010
  • Lyric Poetry Re: My mistakes

    This is pretty good, although I've never been a huge fan of depressing poetry in majority just because there's so much of it. But still, it was a solid piece, ...

    Aug 21, 2010
  • Romantic Novels Re: The gray line (Chapter 1)

    Let me first point out that I hate romances...but so far love this. The things I like: The basic plot seems really interesting so far. At first when it started ...

    Aug 21, 2010
  • Writers Corner Re: Do you remember your first story that you wrote?

    I don't remember my first story EXACTLY, but I remember that when I was around five years old I would tell stories a lot. I had a stroke when I ...

    Aug 20, 2010
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: My Sweet Love

    Your first poem? No way! My first poem sounded more like Dr. Seuss than Shakespere... But really, I'm impressed, I wasn't expecting so much. The writer before me gave you ...

    Aug 20, 2010
  • Lyric Poetry Re: My best friend.

    Well it isn't a bad poem, the problem is that the rhymes are just too common and typical; it was almost as if I knew exactly what lines would procede ...

    Aug 20, 2010
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: We All Struggle To Breathe Sometimes

    First, the technical stuff... I struggle to breath e , (You make this mistake one other time too). Now, as for the topic at-hand, this is a touchy subject and ...

    Aug 20, 2010
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Blood Bond

    Oh, no, not another vampire story!!! But in all honesty, I couldn't stop reading. I was really hooked into your story, and intrigued by your characters, as well as your ...

    Aug 20, 2010


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