StoryWeaver13

Thanks for the review Snoink (haha that username always makes me a good way :P ). And I take the Shel Silverstein thing as an extreme compliment, by the way...he ...

I love all three of these, can't pick a favorite! They're all really good, you have a very artistic eye which is much more rare than it may seem. :wink: ...

Like was already mentioned, just a little too vague and undescriptive. The rhyme scheme seemed slightly forced too. Still, I think there's potential in this. Keep writing. :wink:

Cute poem, I really liked it. No real big things to nit-pick about, so overall it's a fun and enjoyable little poem. :smt001

Mother, you don’t understand The emotions I hide away For every time I tell you You just look the other way. You yell and cuss and throw a fit Over ...

Haha, this is a funny little poem - the thing I love about poetry is that as long as you can understand what it says, grammar can be tossed out ...

I kind of agree with Fan in most respects that have to do with this piece...it's too much telling, not enough thought or perspective. We got a quick view of ...

Thanks for the input guys (I'll return the favor :smt001 ). @ borntobeawriter Beautifully said. BUT you say the writing is familiar, yet when I read further on, she had ...

Grammar, grammar, grammar!!! Sorry, but I've got to put some emphasis on this. :) Sounds like it could be an interesting plot, just keep working on it and KEEP WRITING.

Love the chaos, which I think a lot of people sort of shy from in art(for good reason - it's hard to make chaos look good, but you did :wink: ...

If you or anyone else can review something of mine that'd be great, and I'll be sure to return the favor! :smt001

Hi, I critized the last one of yours a little but I have no complaints about this one. The only thing "attempted" about this is the fact that the sizing's ...

This is a decent poem, just a few suggestions. but now, you're pale, as white as a dove. Take away the comma after now. I wish I could tell you ...

Cool, cool, cool. You said you're interested in publishing it? I think newspapers and magazines will sometimes take in short stories and stuff, particularly if you find some sort of ...

Ooh, creepy...but in a good way. :wink: I think the person above me pretty much covered the critiques, so overall, cool poem and really dramatic.