StoryWeaver13

Hi there Kanome! Okay, so. I'm a pretty picky poetess, particularly when it comes to poems that are of the depressive nature, since it is so oft discussed and it ...

Hey Syb! So, this is a bit of a bare-bones poem in my opinion, which can be a good strategy for expressing grief, but in this case causes it to ...

Hello Magenta! It's been a while since I've written or reviewed, so my apologies if this is a bit less helpful than usual. Well, as someone with a minor case ...

Hey! Okay, so, yikes, so many run-ons. It's hardly even coherent. It's hard to really even sift through the mess to fathom whatever potential lies beyond it, to be honest. ...

Hey Dreamergirl! Here as requested, and I apologize for the delay. :] Now, first and foremost, you may or may not be aware that I am a tough reviewer of ...

Okay, so first and foremost, I will say that prologues typically aren't necessary, and this one didn't feel particularly important (though I could be wrong, seeing as I lack the ...

So, I'm not a rhymey-poem person, but this...this can be one of the few notable exceptions. You've got a really great use of your rhyme scheme here, that helps the ...

Hey! So I'll go paragraph-by-paragraph, then look at it holistically, okay? So the first paragraph has a lot of description - perhaps too much. It gets a little bulky and ...

Hi! First of all, welcome to YWS, and this is such a great way to start! Your talent is already beyond your years. Your words wind together naturally, flowing from ...

"For a certain time, every single night, something special happens. Life stops." I'm not sure I like this first sentence; first, it sounds like something that would be in a ...

Hey there ancient! I actually see a lot of potential in this poem - and, as it is, it is pretty darn good, anyway. This would be great if it ...

Hey there! So, as far as things go technically, this is a decent poem. It covers its bases and provides some strength in its writing. But. I feel as though ...

Hey Cailey! So I'm a pretty tough reviewer of poetry, and a pretty tough reviewer of romantic genres, so this will probably be a very critical review. The repetition is ...

Hey! Okay, so I will openly tell you that I am very picky when it comes to romance, because it can be done very well, or very...not. And more often ...

Hey there Aquestioning! Okay, so I'll review this piece-by-piece, and then take some time to look at the story as a whole. Thoughts/corrections/blurbs will be in double-brackets. "I clutched the ...