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Very nice poem, it created a very vivid image in my head and did not fail to give me a feeling not unlike happiness. I have no critism, bravo! :)

This poem is simply amazing, i personally think it is perfect so no criticism here :)

It seemed more like a newspaper article than a story. The grammar and language was good, but the storyline needs adapting.

I think your poem was great, and it really painted a picture for me, but to me it felt incomplete, but nevertheless well done on a superb peice!