Swires

Thats great, but would LitAgents want to take on a 15 year old?

First of all, I need the name of a middle-class residential area (or maybe an apartment building) as close to the inner city as possible. Park Lane? Second, how busy ...

Thanks for the review, No I dont like Masus as much as The Boatman either but the Boatman wasnt really the villain of the story, Isabel was the villain of ...

Yeah, someone else said about the confusion, I'll be sure to comb out any anti-flow on edit. Thankyou for the comment, It is a really confidence boost when people like ...

Lumos (Dont ask)

Im a terrible poet but I thought I would submit: The Alibird The Alibird, so fine, Its fangs, divine, Its wings, so free, Alibird is She? Its talons, so sharp, ...

This is a giant of a story, I think you may have been better submitting in smaller chunks. Ill crit the beginning. I thought it was good and you kept ...

Yes I loved the character of Elijah.

Has anyone considered sending off to a publisher, has anyone sent or has anyone been published?

This was ok, I would recommend paragraphing, and also instead of explaining, describe. Ie. "the fat man" Instead of this you could work it into the story a little more. ...

Basically you've got to think about what the book is about. LOL! sorry I couldnt be more help.

Yes, thats the one Imp!

Yes it does sound rather odd, but is that just our English humour?

The Boatman may pop up a little later, I just need another project so I can rustle up some more ideas for The Boatman, The Boatman may even be a ...

This is a technique I use in order to develop the personality and physical features of a character, also how much description and showing of that trait should be used ...