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Got through first 1k Prologue The very first Chair of Wind and Darkness was not so very different than the one you might be sitting in now. It was very ...

Well I have a few things to add in and a few scenes to rewrite. im aiming to transform the 17k I have into something like 20 -25k.

lol! Typical British humour.

17k

I know, I was trying to be funny by agreeing with myself...I failed :(

Yes I agree!

Again - past tense is really what I like to read. I can tolerate the present in short stories (thanks to smaur's excellence).

Well if you hate writing with a passion, maybe writing isnt for you? Maybe you should stick with reading? Why force yourself to do something you hate? Like it would ...

Thanks again - that was most helpful.

Weasle Queen seems fun - looking forward to reading some of your stuff.

Define "groupie" - it can mean many things :) Good luck!

Nice. Very interesting

Thankyou for the critique Elein. Much appreciated. Note: These are not chapters, they are scenes. Rosin /1 and Derren 1 could be put into a single chapter (example). I did ...

Yes, if you hadnt told us we would have never have guessed you are living in Poland. Your english is very clear.

Oh dear, rhyme, rhyme, rhyme! It killed the story like the butcher of the somme. Try writing new stuff, forgetting about the rhyme - the rhyme here made it seem ...