TaylaChase

Hi I liked the story, but there were a few problems; Karta pulled her trusty pistol out and shot a warning shot. Having 'shot' twice in the same sentence makes ...

Thanks you everyone for reviewing my story! You've been lots of help! I revised my story again and hopefully it's a bit better than before! Thanks again! ~Tayla

Hi Good job writing your story, I liked it. I've just got a few nitpicks for you, though; One of the caves seemed like it was covered with something from ...

Hi This is great! I really enjoyed this piece! I liked Max's unusual hobby. It was funny and you kept the reader drawn in to the very end of the ...

Hi You need to explain a bit more about what's going on. I would also explain a bit more about the characters. She pulled herself up on her to lean ...

Good job, that was interesting! as I watched such naïve human aspirations and passions shine through in the world’s their subconscious’s will me to create. This sentence kinda confused me ...

Hi! I really like this part as well. The way you write it really draws the reader in and keeps them there. I hardly found any errors or problems, great ...

Hi! This was really good! I was very intrigued and it makes me want to read more! I just had one thing that I wasn't so sure about. To me ...

Hi, Good job, I liked this piece of work. I found a few errors; "take place over the Pacific Ocean, eastern Asia and Australia, and western North and South America." ...

Hi, Since your piece was kind of short, I can't help you much, but I did find some errors; “It’s your turn Kirsten, truth, Dare, Donkey dare, Love, kiss, Life?” ...

Hi Zanna! I liked your story a lot!! I like how you made each world connected to her in some way. Also I found a few sentences that I'm not ...

Hi, Good job so far, keep writing. I found a missing letter; If you lived you whole life believing you are just an ordinary kid It should be; "If you ...

Hi I found a few errors; There was something familiar about this mean I think you meant "man" there we lions and elephants carved into the wood. "were" my skin ...

Will you please review this for me? It's my entry for 'Which Path to take' and I need more reviews so I can make it better. Dragon Tamer Fantasy Fiction ...

Will you please review this for me? Dragon Tamer Fantasy Fiction G Thanks! ~Tayla