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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Valkyrie - Prologue

    This is a great opening, which set the scene very well. You showed the main character's personality, traits and lifestyle, and he seems like a developed and believable character. Also, ...

    Sep 19, 2011


No, it's not that you didn't succeed. You accomplished a lot, but, if you want to touch people, don't concentrate so much on rhyme and metre. Think more about what you want to say instead of how you're saying it.
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