TheDreadPirate

Hullo! I very much enjoyed reading this, and I can't wait to see what happens next :D Spelling and grammar - cars rushed /passed/ - /it's/ heard me - referring ...

Hello! I enjoyed the overall feeling of this story, as it was easy to follow and had a positive tone. I thought that the writing could be a little bit ...

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I think my favourite part of your writing is the stream-of-thought your characters have, their reactions feel very real and immediate. The switching between "he" and "it" when initially describing ...