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  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Cortez Shivick(Chapter 5)

    Great job with those details! I was more invested in Cortez's story this time around. I think the interview will be a great opportunity to see how Cortez presents himself ...

    Mar 9, 2021
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Billowing

    Good job! I think this applies to a lot of things. It reminds me of how one of my friends became a completely different person in just a couple weeks, ...

    Mar 8, 2021
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Narrative Re: If I Ever Tried

    Dude, this is so good. I re-read it four or five times. I think most everyone thinks "If I tried harder, I could have been something" multiple times in their ...

    Mar 8, 2021
  • Poetry » Fanfiction, General Re: Not the First Goodbye

    I haven't read/watched the piece of media you're writing about, but I still enjoyed this poem! Quatrains are a real challenge, especially when you add rhythm and rhyme, and you ...

    Mar 8, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Realistic, General Re: Cortez Shivick(Chapter 4)

    My main thought on the novel thus far is that you skipped over a lot of details. For instance, what was Cortez and Shayene's marriage like at the beginning? How ...

    Mar 8, 2021
  • Poetry » Literature, Realistic Re: Hope is a seed that should be allowed to grow to infinity

    The title's a bit of a bait-and-switch, but that's whatever. I do, however, like that you just told a story. "Show, don't tell" doesn't apply to everything. You show emotions ...

    Mar 8, 2021
  • Poetry » Other, Dramatic Re: Worried Lies has promise to keep

    I think you have a lot of good ideas in this poem, but I would try to re-write it as a free verse poem rather than trying to stick your ...

    Mar 8, 2021
  • Poetry » Realistic, Literature Re: What do tears cost?

    Your poem is well-written, and it does make me think. Crying costs us nothing, and the relief it brings is so temporary compared to the embarrassment of crying in front ...

    Mar 8, 2021
  • Other » Humor, General Re: Because I love fun staffs

    This is so random and I love it. I'm still not sure what happened in between, but my guess is that Myr accidentally turned the world upside down and earned ...

    Mar 8, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Horror, Supernatural Re: Prologue - Hanako-San

    This is a really great story! I like that Inari only discovered her curiosity after the encounter with the ghost. Her desire for peace in her life became a desire ...

    Mar 8, 2021
  • Short Story » Realistic, General Re: Frostbite

    You had me on the edge of my seat. Reminds me of "To Build a Fire", but I was much more invested in this protagonist. Despite knowing nothing about them, ...

    Mar 8, 2021


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— Roald Dahl