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Man. You weren't kidding about grim. Also, it's quite unfortunate that I'm currently reading Oryx & Crake, because that's a hell of a curve to be graded on. I'm doing ...

Hey! So... Promising beginning. I like the use of present tense, but it isn't consistent throughout. In the first line change "she said" to "she says" to fix this. Otherwise, ...

I'm really trying hard to imagine what 'armless green monsters' is an allusion to. I mean, don't take that to mean that you're being vague. Maybe you are, but maybe ...

Okay, so, let's do this. First of all, I understand that you want to paint the character as an outsider, and this is obviously a necessary part of the kind ...