Theodorable

Here's mine.

Well, um... is it going to continue? It seems like a prologue to a story. So if it is then great, but if not you might want to change it. ...

Blue, Purple and Red Flash in my face I turn to you and try to keep pace. I slip and fall to the ground, You turn and look around. But ...

James James looked over at Victoria, making sure she hadn't freaked out about the whole argument. She looked fine, so he gave her hand a squeeze. "Hey, you're okay, right?" ...

Blue?

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Hiya! I see that you got your story up. Well, I know that this is your first story ever and I know the first couple of chapters (so i'm at ...

Hey, I have to say that I agree with everyone, it's good but it needs a little bit more in there. When you post a scene you need to tell ...

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Green?

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Banned because of your incessant rambling.