TimmyJake

Why I used this formatting is because I wanted to do some experimentation with my poetry... I love trying different places! :D I was trying to isolate the different parts, ...

Thank yo for this wonderful review!

With the parts in brackets and such, I was trying to make the reader understand that there two people who were talking inside the characters head, hence the two different ...

Erm, I don't recall seeing it, but I am sooo forgetful... Brilliant! (hee-hee. I love Englihsness!)

hee-hee, you sound like my sisters. :P

Welcome. :mrgreen:

hee-hee You did a good job with his height. I am ALWAYS banging my head into something. I have a few scars on my face from hitting stuff... So yeah.

Yay! Please do. :)

Yusss... Or maybe use sound to your advantage. Screeching wheels. Screaming passengers. The driver throwing the wheel as fast as he can. Flashing images like that speed up a scene, ...

Would like this, but I already have... sooo Well done! :D

Nope! All good. :)

Not confusing at allll... Nooo... I didn't realize that the first time. :P

Okay. It does indeed clear things up. :) Thank you for showing me.

*knocks shyly* they haven't caught this as a review yet. :P

hee-hee *sways to the entrancing chant*