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  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Fear Holds Us Back

    That is so beautiful and descriptive and just amazing! Please add punctuation to avoid the endless runon sentence. Otherwise, it's great the way it is. :)

    Jun 21, 2012
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: On Wafts of Lilac

    I love this so much! It's so beautiful! "And gather rainwater to drink as it’s cried" I think you mean that you drink water as your tears flow out? Perhaps ...

    Jun 21, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Night Riders

    I really like this, it's imaginative and held my attention well. I just have a few things. First line, "it's" should be "its". It's means it is, its is the ...

    Jun 21, 2012
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Conversation 17

    It's good, but I have a few points for improvement. "So she wears a blue gown; as she stands down." I don't really see what that has to do with ...

    Jun 21, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Love Like a Couch

    I like this! I would just try to be more specific where you can be. For example, after you say it is a place for sadness and anger, maybe mention ...

    Jun 21, 2012
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Fly Free

    I love this! It's well written, pretty, and shows what you feel! I would recommend adding more description. Example, I want desperately instead of just I want. Instead of light ...

    Jun 21, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Shotgun Wedding on a Bus

    Wow... That's quite a comparison between your two characters! I'd be careful about how you're typing things in in the lines. It's a little confusing to me how you have ...

    Jun 21, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: The Magnolia Leaf

    Sorry about my nothing comment, I misclicked haha. I think your poem would be great if you cut it after line 16, but, it is good the way it is. ...

    Jun 21, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: The Magnolia Leaf

    Jun 21, 2012
  • Other » Dramatic, Romantic Re: Beautiful Nightmare - The Next Best Thing

    That's really sad... But I liked it! It was well written and obviously you wrote the way you either feel or would feel in this situation. I'm not sure what ...

    Jun 19, 2012


I am and always will be optimist, the hoper of far-flung hopes, the dreamer of improbable dreams.
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