ToritheMonster

Thanks very much! I don't love the ending at all, but yes, I wrote it sort of like it could be to a parent. I'll work on clarifying and getting ...

Thanks! I totally agree, the ending I just sort of... I don't know exactly, but it didn't make sense even to me as I wrote it. I'll probably alter it ...

Thank you!

You need some paragraphs, darling. I have trouble reading giant blocks of text. My eyes can't handle it.

Just stumbled upon this again. Apparently, Mexican is a language, and the best way to dispose of radioactive items is to throw them out. Ohhhhh my.

Thanks! Yeah, I wasn't in love with the whole scenario. I actually had to write this on the fly in about twenty minutes because one of my actors for a ...

Thanks. :) There should be more nice people in the world like you YWSers.

Thank you very much!

Misusing "thy" and a thesaurus do not equal a poem.

No problem! I'm glad I could help. Let me know how it all turns out.

No problem! I'm glad I could help. Let me know how it all turns out.

The story I'm trying to write will come together in time, at which point I'll go back and edit it. Personally, I don't think calling someone's work utter garbage is ...

Thanks! Yeah, I'll work on my grammar stuff. I'll definitely try to tie the sections together, too. Nice to actually get a helpful review XD.

I have no idea what you're talking about, but... thanks??

Well, I mean, this wasn't intended to be a finished work. I just write for fun and wanted to know what other people thought. But if it's utter garbage, then ...