Ventomology

Oh how lovely! This is an excellent beginning to your I story (though I still think you ought to repost your new version). I especially like the lady's character; she's ...

Hello there! What an installment we have here. Fabulous and interest-stealing as always. Anyhow, as I am currently limited to my mobile phone this review day, the review will be ...

I knew it was coming, but I swear I almost choked! Andrew has some issues... Anyways, I have some nitpicks for you: Andrew gestured with hands, which were beside his ...

I'm back! And... also not sure what to say. I think I know why you're disappointed with the chapter though. There's almost no real action. Once you got through Mr. ...

Hallo! Sorry it's been so long since I reviewed your work. I never seem to find it until it's several chapters in. Now, onto the review! I am slightly confused ...

I'm back! This part was stunning! A nice addition to what you've written before. However, there are a few issues. 1. The character's voices don't match the tone of your ...

What a dream! I admit freely that it is not one I would ever want to have, however important and symbolic it will be. It's all so scary... Anyway, I'm ...

Heya! Happy Review Day! Now then, what a chapter! I'm not sure if all of your work is this long, but you may want to break things up in the ...

Heya! First of all, welcome to YWS! Now, I hate to say it, but I'm rather unfamiliar with marching bands. I've been in band for years now, but the fact ...

Hello there! Mostly, I agree with what Cricket has already stated (and she took most of the nitpicks too... Leave some for the rest of us, Cricket!), so this review ...

Heya! I'm back! Anyways, just to make sure, you did read this to yourself first, right? There were a few things that stuck out to me as being a bit ...

Yo! How's life? Anyhow, nice addition to the story! I'm not sure where you're going quite yet, but it's still exciting. Now then, some nitpicks: Personally, I think you used ...

Goodness gracious! What a whirlwind of action! I love it! I'm afraid I don't have much for you; you have an excellent hand for action. But I do have a ...

Yo! Apologies for not seeing this one before I got to part 2. Anyhow, on with the show: I'm not sure putting in a chart of Zack's grades was a ...

Heya! Nice addition! Anyhow, let's get on with the review. First thing: You really don't need to put that little dialogue note at the beginning of each installment. Most people ...