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  • Poetry » Other, General Re: (Untitled)

    Hey Julia, I'm not going to do any intense line-by-line reviewing, because I honestly have no clue what I'm doing as far as poetry. But, I will say that I ...

    Jul 3, 2009
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: Marriage, Who Needs It?

    Hey, Obviously I've heard this piece before (Duhh), but I've never actually read it. Hmm. So, here we go... Needless to say, we are a strange species. Just wondering, is ...

    Jul 1, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: The TWISTED teenage life: prologue

    Hello, I review as I read, so I'm sorry if I critique anything that you remedy later on. :) The cooling wind swings briefly in the humid, July air. As ...

    Jun 30, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: The Beginning

    Hello Amyrose! Welcome to YWS! One thing I'm not sure you know is that we like to keep a 2:1 ratio between reviews and posts. So before you post something ...

    Jun 30, 2009
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Simplicity

    Hello, One last lyric. :) Hypocrisy Lying, betraying Idiocy Okay, interesting lead in...:) Say something smart If your so smart Repetition of "smart" gets a little irksome. If you’re so ...

    Jun 27, 2009
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: I miss you

    Hello! Anothah review for ya as asked. :) Did you see me cry…. When you left I died… This is the tiniest bit melodramatic... You made a choice It wasn’t ...

    Jun 27, 2009
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Protection from the lions

    'Ello! How're you? It's me...again. :) Haha. So, off to it then. They have tracked me down They surround me You need to pick a tense. It seems like further ...

    Jun 26, 2009
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: The Battle

    Hello again! So, first of all, in the future, just to help me out... :) would you mind marking verses and choruses etc? That'd be awesome! And second, I like ...

    Jun 26, 2009
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: You and Your Eyes

    Hello tnme, Alright, so I think I mentioned that poetry (and the like) isn't really my thing. So I'm going to attempt to give you a good review, but take ...

    Jun 26, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Currently Untitled(1)

    Hello Vivacious! Here to do your review... :) Spurts of water gushed out of Viktor's mouth as he stared at the TV, heart hammering, eyes wide . I was very ...

    Jun 26, 2009
  • Other » General, General Re: The Dirt-Colored Pony

    Joyfulnoise, The way you've posted this right now it's really difficult to read..It's like a block of text. If you would add spaces between paragraphs (including dialog) I'd be happy ...

    Jun 26, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Leather and Lace - Chapter One

    Hello! I review as a go along, so if I mention anything that you fix later on I'm sorry! He’s looking down at me with a blank expression on his ...

    Jun 26, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Addiction

    Hello! I'm going to review as I read, so forgive me if I make any assumptions that you correct later on in the piece. :) the first place he’d spotted ...

    Jun 25, 2009
  • Other » General, General Re: Elephant Tales

    Hello again! Well, firstly I agree with Kyllorac in that it was well written. But, I am also very, very confused by this. I feel like you do when someone ...

    Jun 24, 2009
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: On the Subtle Differences Between Identity and Culture

    Oooooh. Sociology! My favorite! :) So, I was going to try to help you edit this, but instead of doing anything constructive I was mentally saying why you were wrong... ...

    Jun 22, 2009


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