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Re: glory
There is an undeniable lushness to your language. This is craftsmanship worth noting because it is startling in its clarity. You clearly have a gift for impressionistic sensory layering where ...
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Re: Tales from New Kakari: Remy (pt. 3)
We meet again for the third and, assumedly, final part... The first third of the chapter is the strongest portion because it is the most honest. Last chapter, I mentioned ...
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Re: Tales from New Kakari: Remy (pt. 2)
Ah, now the action begins. This certainly delivered. The voice continues to be engaging, the banter is sharp, and the character dynamics feel lived-in, which is all you could ask ...
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Re: Tales from New Kakari: Remy (pt. 1)
I had written part of this review, yet never finished it... Here I am now. So, the atmosphere, call it cyberpunk-lite by way of high school nostalgia, is your strongest ...
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Re: Not Strong Enough: Chapter Two
First of all, the dialogue pops. The repartee between Sam and Jebediah is rhythmic, lived-in, believable in the way only long-term couples who have suffered each other’s laundry habits can ...
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Re: Everything She Could Never Be
For what it's worth, the writing is crisp, sometimes even mesmerizing. The atmosphere is immediately heavy, almost indulgently so, as though the story knows exactly what it wants to be: ...
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Re: The Song of Home and What It Makes of Us - 3
This chapter is immensely readable, even with little previous context. The atmosphere is thick and competent: the reeking boats, the bruised workers, the gray sky sagging low as if it ...
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Re: Gods of Glassacre CH 3: Echoes of the Forgotten
To begin, I haven't read the previous chapters, but the prose is well written. It is lush, ornate, deeply enamored with itself, and structured well. Every surface glistens, every wall ...
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Re: Carrieta -- Author's Note
I agree that this is unreviewable because it is not a work of fiction, nor an essay, nor an artwork, nor... anything else that can be "reviewed" on this website. ...
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Re: he said he'd cure your ills
Hmph. I am not one to read poetry oftentimes, but I wanted to try my hand at this. This poem has, at first glance, the glimmer of something primordial, and ...
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Re: Incompletion
Is this a story about the violence of assimilation? The jealousy between first- and second-generation immigrant families? Academic alienation? Identity dissolution? Friendship fracture? Body image? Co
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Re: Sew Up My Mouth (Chapter 2)
So... Azure and Two Time sit together under a sunset, and this, at the start, is effective. The mismatched sandwiches speak more clearly than their words. Two Time’s distancing behaviors ...
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Re: Sew Up My Mouth (Chapter 1)
I cannot say I am familiar with the source material, but you clearly know how to write gestures. I believe the love here, or at least the longing for it. ...
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Re: Nothing ever changes.
The monotony is established within the first sentence, and then, quite fittingly, I suppose, it repeats itself. In theory, the father's death should be the catalyst, some moment when the ...
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Re: the day the world ends (Part 1)
Let me begin with the fact that the craftsmanship is solid. The voice of the narrator, which happens to be a cat, is consistent, charming, occasionally quite funny, and a ...
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