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  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: Race of the Werewolves

    Remarks and other add-ins are in braces: David sat in the garden, playing with his ball. It was getting late, and the moon was shining brightly. “David McDonald, come inside ...

    Feb 4, 2008
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Of the Lands of Ray and Hammer, Segment 5

    If anyone's wondering how to pronounce alien words, let me know. I can give out translations and pronunciations. Of the Lands of Ray and Hammer , Segment 5, "Chosen": Weeks ...

    Feb 1, 2008
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Questions

    Comments, corrections, or add-ins are in braces. “What about stars? What are stars like?” Casey shoved him playfully{,} “You asked me that already. Gimme a new one.” Brian shrugged and ...

    Feb 1, 2008
  • General Fiction Novels Re: Chapter 1 of Pepita Borrico

    I allowed you to be my friend after this review. All of my added stuff is in braces. Dear Diary, I’m {Contractions should be avoided in formal writing. This is ...

    Feb 1, 2008
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Of the Lands of Ray and Hammer, Segment 4

    If anyone's wondering how to pronounce alien words, let me know. I can give out translations and pronunciations. Of the Lands of Ray and Hammer , Segment 4, "Joined": Lydighet ...

    Jan 31, 2008
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Breaking Through the Madness

    First off, I would like to say that I don't understand why you would want to post something if you thought it was “raw.” (I have confidence though that I ...

    Jan 31, 2008
  • General Articles Re: Public Speech: School Shootings, Part II

    Remarks/add-ins are in braces: Good morning{,} teachers and fellow students. My name is Kelsey Howlett{.} {T}oday I {will speak to you} about the school shootings that have taken place in ...

    Jan 31, 2008
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Of the Lands of Ray and Hammer, Segment 3

    Of the Lands of Ray and Hammer , Segment 3, "Urchin": As the day's tasks came to a close, Lydighet departed from the Usikkers. Pamaus insisted that Lydighet stay for ...

    Jan 30, 2008
  • Science-Fiction Novels Re: *Need Name* January 23, 2950 1400h Earth, Milky Way Galaxy

    Some of the remarks are for style. Others are for added or needed clarity. These remarks are in braces. Prologue {} January 23, 2950{;} 1400{ }h{ours;} Earth, Milky Way Galaxy ...

    Jan 30, 2008
  • Fantasy Novels Re: StoweAway (Updated 2/12/08)

    Hi, Mr. Badbear! Comments, edits, or other offered documentation is set in braces. I also may use strike marks. There w{ere} a series of events that led to Lord Isaac’s ...

    Jan 30, 2008
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Of the Lands of Ray and Hammer, Segment 2

    Of the Lands of Ray and Hammer , Segment 2, "In Foresight": When he rose from slumber the following morning, Lydighet's thoughts still dwelt on the village's decision. Face and ...

    Jan 29, 2008
  • Science-Fiction Short Stories Re: Arctic Pt 2 of 2

    Added material is in brackets (well, I might put in a few strike marks.): Half frozen to death on the tundra, a gentle voice whispered in his ear. He was ...

    Jan 29, 2008
  • Science-Fiction Short Stories Re: Arctic Pt 1 of 2

    My additions, comments, or corrections are in braces: The arctic winds blew fiercely against a slow moving figure, threatening to beat him down into the frozen terrain. But the wind’s ...

    Jan 29, 2008
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: A Lone soul

    Remarks or corrections are within the braces/{}. Katharine rolled down the window. She herself {This is odd. In could be something like this: Even with the cold, air-conditioned air blasting ...

    Jan 29, 2008
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Why did it happen to me?

    I'm not sure if I'm just supposed to say if I like it or not or if I'm supposed to critique or help edit grammar and style. I'm going for ...

    Jan 28, 2008


Doubt thou the stars are fire, doubt that the sun doth move. Doubt truth to be a liar, but never doubt I love.
— "Hamlet," William Shakespeare