Whitewings

OI! you're harsh on me cuz you care! 1.Starting with the first and second line, " f ear" and the " f eel" make the reading a bit awkward. It ...

It's really got a good pace and the plot is getting interesting. I don't do exact quotes for nitpicky stuff, but I do have just two things: 1. When the ...

This is a really good piece of writing :D There's just a couple of things that I picked out: 1. Some of the senteces are missing punctuations, it might seem ...

I liked this poem alot because it was easy to follow, and the descriptions were very vivid. There's just two parts that seems a bit out: 1. "brain pumped with ...

To start: 1. In the beginning, it's a bit unclear when you say that "I wish the world today was just like you". Who exactly is you? This is because ...

K, let's see: 1. When you're writing in first person, it should not take that long for the name and gender to be introduced. Generally, it should the first thing. ...