Willow

Interesting I just noticed that you repeat things a bit, like her looking at him warily. Try to find a different word for it or something. I really like this ...

Your start is good, but I kinda lost it with the call. Some background info would also be nice. Otherwise, it sounds as though it's up to a good start.

I really liked this. There are like two typos or something, but the rest is great. I'd love to know what happens next. :D

Thanks Nate, I'll work on it

I liked it. It sounds interesting, but I'd love to know more, like who is the guy and what does he look like, and why she is betroved to him.

Thanks She's actually a he, but I guess I have to make that more clear. :wink: The story's kinda based on a true one. I just thought it was an ...

Okay, thanks