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I think you are ready to move on now to Chapter Two. :) ... once you fix some tiny things: You should avoid using numbers in your writing unless you ...

Jared, you are amazing. *self-conscious* You really, really don't have to critique this. It's just that if you want more pieces to review... Breaking Storm :} Cheers, Camille

Thank-you for your comments, everyone! I'm thinking of using this in my novel, and if I do, I will definitely be adding character development and all. But for the time ...

Hey there, kittykat! :D I am very impressed that you can write things like this at eleven (I don't even think I could write poems a year ago... and I'm ...

Hey Emily! :D I'm back again to review your revised edition. Blood. Sweat. Tears. Pain. It all falls down when we let that ball hit the floor. It only has ...

Muse! You are beauteous and gorgeous and extremely pretty. Your hair = pawnage. My hair is always.. like, spazzing out, and it's so annoying. xD

I think method B is better, although I have written a few exercises using method A just for fun. I think it's a little hard to digest when you describe ...

Hey Jared! *smacks head* And I thought I could arrive before the other critiquers! *points at JabberHut and yells 'crit hog!'* Anyways. Forgive me if I repeat anything, but these ...

OMG OMG! Maybe >> You look so much like a girl I know! You're so prettiful, and I love your hat. Gwen >> Ning - you're gorgeous, as always. I ...

:D Thank-you! Hehe, I made a new one... I didn't really mean to, but my computer was wacking out and I thought my original had been deleted. >.> Yeah, flying ...

Thank-you so much everyone for the comments! Yeah... I realize that I kind of posted this without thinking about it before, and, well, I shouldn't have. I don't think I'll ...

Hey Jared! *smacks head* And I thought I could arrive before the other critiquers! *points at JabberHut and yells 'crit hog!'* Anyways. Forgive me if I repeat anything, but these ...

Lol, hi ning! :D Eight more years... no worries... :P Oh... the picture? Yeah, I burst out laughing after I took it, and the thing on my neck is a ...

Wow, Via - this is so good. :) I have read poems on this subject before, but you managed to write yours in a cliché-free way. So kudos on that. ...

Ummm.... I was going to critique this, seeing as I owe you two reviews, but all it says is 'i'... Oh well. I'll find something else in your portfolio. Cheers, ...