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Lol, hey Gwen! Thanks for letting us know you have to pee - I'll go alert the post! xD And Gwen, don't pay attention to the votes! otes! tes! es! ...

Hey blustar! I love animals and the environment too - I just sent an application thing to be in that Usergroup - and I would gladly review anything of yours ...

Ah, Mad, you hate us both, so what's the point? xD This is such a stupid topic - I must have been REALLY bored, lol.

Thanks everyone! Maybe I should get this moved to Other Fiction, though, because its flash fiction. But I am considering incorporating this into a large story...if that is the case, ...

Echo to Floydian up there. This definitely needs more imagery, and it is kind of navel-gazing. There's no feeling in it - you are just repeating and listing things like ...

There should be a forum entitled, 'Cliched poetry' or 'Navel-Gazing'. The poor 'Lyric poetry' forum is clogged with poems about unrequited love and vampires. Hmm... nothing really stuck out for ...

Favorite movie: I would have to say Labyrinth. Who doesn't love demented puppets ruled by David Bowie? I love that movie! David Bowie is hysterical. :) avorite room in my ...

(The signature for me is: " My books are water; those of the great geniuses are wine. (Fortunately) Everybody drinks water. " - Mark Twain (1835-1910) Got YWS?) Username: 75% ...

(seeminglymeaningless: 'Ayra' is a name of Jewish origin; nothing to do with Eragon.) Username: 80% Lol, its coolio. Avatar: 65% Eh...kinda boring. But those glasses are hysterical! Custom title: 90% ...

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Sureal already pointed out the nit-picky things, but here are my opinions/advice: Spacing: Please, organize this into paragraphs. Emotion: This piece has no emotion in it - I assume that ...

Hey Derek! Sota was sitting on his bed studying. This is a rathe anemic opening line. -_- I agree with Errant that you should never start with the main character's ...

That was your username, Snoink?! *falls over laughing* Lol!

Wow, that article was amazing! You're so smart - and so hysterical. I did the Mary-Sue test and this is what it said: 21-35 points: Borderline-Sue. Your character is cutting ...

Maybe you can't seem to stick with 'em because you don't like them? I dunno. If I were you, I'd try writing excerpts from each idea and seeing how you ...