Wolfdaemon

heh heh, yeah, she volunteered very eagerly for a mission, and when he said "you could die" he's talking about what she is going to do, on the mission. thanks! ...

thanks :) i love descriptions. hahaha

ahha! thanks, i needed a fresh eye for this piece :) i am a little scared to post my next piece, hahaha, i am afraid it might not be as ...

thanks, yes it makes sense! i try to make my stories easy to read, i love the tolkien style but its just so darn hard to read, soo, i make ...

haha, thanks, i am working on editing the first chapter, its a little long. :)

thanks. i have to admit its fun to write. . . sort of wierd, but even i dont know whats going to happen next, like the albanian gryphon, ahahaha. 8) ...

very good, i love the story. u am, as i often admit, bad at grammar reviews, soo, i am just saying this on the story part, i REALLY liked it.

i really liked it! nice style of writing!

by the way, the chapters are longer, so should i put it as a attachment or just post it?

thanks everyone! i will most likely post chap. 1 later today, its going pretty fast!

thanks, i am pretty sure i got all the things you suggested, shook things up a bit, scrambled and unscrambled :)

i liked it!! i love the idea of hybrids, i have something like it in my story! i loved the different elements too!

that was very good! i would read more! sorry, i am not good at critique with grammar and what not. ha ha, kind of frightening though

the reason used mc1 and mc2 is because i am very protective of my characters identities lol. i didn't want their names stolen. i put a lot of thought into ...

thanks! i know i have a tenedancy for long sentence's and caps and puntuation. it can get annoying sometimes, i am like "look at that name, why isnt it capped!" ...