Wolferion

I see there's another poem from you LiteHawk =) This one feels less grand then the one about loosing sense to write though. I'll explain. I want to change the ...

Hiya! Alright, let's start with the critique first and then the opinion =) I do not know if you tried to have it rhyme, I can't any kind of a ...

Kamas, you've stolen everything there's to say >:0 I agree with Kamas about it being too repetitive. As I myself learned, long verses are pretty much counter-productive. Your poem does ...

Hiya! Well, let's start with what caught my eye at the poem first. I think that your trapt should be trapped . Next thing that I noticed is that you ...

Hiya! I'm Kyo and I'll review this today. Now, I believe you used free verses... There's no proper rhyming. Also, I recommend using punctuations in the poetry, so the reader ...

Erm, I'm sorry I'm going to go harsh with this. The words used created a bit of mystery for me and I actually tried to "decipher" what you wanted to ...

Greetings to the YWS community =) Well, I fail to find any kind of a rhythm at end of the sentences, thus whole piece of work feels like a ... ...

Hi! I've read your poem and it kind of pulled me in, so I have to admit that your poem is a good piece of work =) I found the ...

Hi! Seeing as this was just posted and I've got the time I'll try reviewing your work =) First of all I'd like to point out a possible mistake ( ...

I'm sorry you won't find my review really that great as for sure many others can write, I'm still new at it ^^ I'll go by the example of some ...

I have to admit I agree with people before me that this is a really great piece! I really liked to read it and I'd love to see your next ...

Hiya! Seeing that you haven't had this reviewed yet and I've got some time, I've tried reviewing it, so here goes. I've tried correcting a few places that repeat later ...

I'd agree with pudin.junidf , I'm not any specialist in terms of writing, but from a viewpoint of a casual reader, I found it confusing and flat at times. As ...