WriteWriter

I really like this poem. I could see the image of this happening. I like your choice of words and the title(it drew me in). Keep it up!(:

All I have to say is that this is amazing.

Very descriptive, I love it!

Amazing, I really enjoyed reading it an being able to almost see it as it was happening.

Amazing. It was like I was there, watching the scene envelope in front of me. Keep writing!!

I really liked this poem, I have written poems myself, but this is an amazing poem. You should write more poems!(:

I liked your choice of words, the way I could almost feel the words float off the page.

This is a very good short story, personally, I could read it a few more times. I really liked the way that you explained how their emotions were. Nicely done!(:

Wow. I think it's very well spoken. Used the wrong format for it though. There should be commas.