Wulie

It confused me a tad but after reading it a few times you start to understand it to some extent though I don't perticually love it.

I like this poem alot how you wrote it was beautiful however I do agree it is a tiny winy bit clichee :). wu x[/pre][/code]

Thank you - thats how I wanted the reader to feel... :)!

Thank you muchously :)! wu x

First of all thanks :)! lol I know I'm not a great writer thats why I post on here to get help! 'her name in your arms'? Huh? What do ...

That last line Just computers telling me you’ll never come back. I was trying to say that the answermachine was telling me you're never coming back.... make senseness? Sunset settling ...

Tv - paparatise ( sorry spelt wrong) that whole stanza is to do with the publictiy... Poltions safe behind their guards, Soldiers naked to the violence, This stanza is to ...

its not supposed to be horrific or anything I'm trying to refer the start of war to family life. I know I spelt its wrong I'm not good at spelling ...

I liek this poem I liked the words you used to capture the feeling I can really imagine it in my head. I see a sort of message though it ...

I really love this it captures you with the words it is a wonderful poem, I wished I could write like that :)! wu

Hey - I can see this peom hasnt worked and I can understand that as its from my thoughts lol I will now go forth and explain:: First stanza - ...

I agree. The last line make sense to me but I can see thats because I wrote it... its about a girl who is hiding from the person she loved ...

love it I really do... nothing to say sorry!!! wu x

I totally agree with you myriadne!!!! I'm not happy with tihs poems I've got the right ideas lol just not the right words so I shall change it thank you ...

I really love your stuff I a\m a bit like same I just love things and never very good with saying what to change. There really isn't anything wrong with ...