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Nice, but please slow down. it feels as if you are rushing and it leaves the reader confused as to what is going on. A lot more description would help. ...

Much.MUCH better. Wow, you really have a gift. Nice continuation. Keep on writing! So doctor, please understand. This is all an act. I think your the one with the problem. ...

REALLY NICE! Grammar is in bold People usually drink wine with meals, Rosé, white , or red regardless, I take a swig of poison, but don't take salt, but arsenic ...

This is really good, but it sounds more like the prelude to a short story or novel or something like it.You seem to be on to something here. If i ...

Really Nice! Mother had been continuously shuffling around the house and talking to herself this whole time, during which she had managed to put a plate of breakfast before me. ...

Lovely, just a few things. The grammar things are in bold. Well, it proba b ly was not the smartest thing to let her go flying after she just grew ...

People things Are worth giving up For a nice pair of wings. I was just confused... did you mean People-things , or People,things ? Other than that, very nice. short ...

Really nice... You can really see that Pete is well characterized. Good job. He speaks like a real human being. I know that sounds weird, but if you look at ...

Nice, but the script was short and didn't give us much to go on... It's a little hard to follow since each person speak exactly like the person above them( ...