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Re: Chapter 1: My Wolf Mother Makes Me Fight an Army of Monsters.
WOWOAH. First off, let me tell you that this has a really good start! I can feel the Percy Jackson vibe coming from this piece. You've definitely captured that tone ...
Apr 16, 2016 -
Re: How We Made The World Just A Little Bit Nicer - Teedum, Teedey! It's Part of the Game We Play!, Episode 10
Alright, so, first of all- I want to congratulate you on this piece of work. Its good. ~ Though, some of your sentences are mediocre and I feel as if ...
Apr 16, 2016 -
Re: Zu pt.3
Alright so, since this is intended to be a short chapter, I'll give you a short review!~ I hope this helps. x More thought and emotion could be put into ...
Apr 16, 2016 -
Re: 7. Thoughts
Alright, so. Here is my criticism intended to improve your writing skills. I hope this helps. x UHUUM. I, myself write in third-person and that might be why I favor ...
Apr 16, 2016