YoungWalter

the idea of the little boy is interesting and i liked it, but not 100% original, little varitation of the little girl or boy of horror or the black dog ...

i think its beautiful. i dont say that much perhaps because I can be harsh, but I simply wish that i written it myself. I felt both their pains without ...

I really like this as a well structured piece of poetry, the rhyme scheme (A,B,C,B) isnt too plain but retains a nice rhythmic simplicity, and the syllable sceme isnt too ...

Hi there, Although I admire the obvious passion behind your content, i find fault in the loose rhythm. I feel you could combat this by correlating your syllables, for example ...