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Yusshin

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The Pain-Chapter 4&5 *REVISED*

    “I have raised you since you were only ten years and I thought I had taught you well! Why do you choose to turn on me now?” Ten years... old? ...

    Apr 14, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The Pain-Chapter 3 *REVISED*

    “No, no, this will never do!” the seamstress, Annaliza , cried, throwing her hands up in disgust. I don't like how this is set up, but it's technically correct. In ...

    Apr 14, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Can You See Me? (Chapter Three)

    Christmas, birthdays, Easter, they’re all celebrations (;) not funerals. Semi-colon misuse. That needs to be a dash, preferably. It was a warm Spring day in the beginning of June, and ...

    Apr 14, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Can You See Me? (Chapter Two ~ Part two)

    I felt as though I was having some terrible nightmare (;) where my heart would come spilling out of my chest at any moment. Semi-colon misuse resulting in a fragment ...

    Apr 14, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Can You See Me? (Chapter Two)

    Again, just posting what I noticed. “I’m so right, aren’t I?” He said, nodding at me. That "H" in "He" should be lower-case. “Is there something you’d like to share ...

    Apr 14, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Can you see me? (Prologue)

    I haven't rooted through the reviews above; I'll just post what I found. I didn’t know that she was my sister at first, I didn’t even know where she’d come ...

    Apr 14, 2010


We shall not cease from exploration, and the end of all our exploring will be to arrive where we started and know the place for the first time.
— T.S. Eliot