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  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The Mad Swordsman (experimental)

    Thanks so much for the crit!! :D Hello, there. I find it odd that you haven't read much fantasy in which there are detailed sword fights, that's quite strange. I ...

    Aug 24, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The Mad Swordsman (experimental)

    Hey! First of all, thanks for the crit! No it wasn't too harsh, and even if it was, I'm not the type to reject crits. :lol: ^ This part here ...

    Aug 24, 2009
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Lost in the forest

    Syte: Thanks for the constructive criticism :D I edited out the mistakes you pointed out. I put "short" in the title because it was short,not because it was a short ...

    Jul 19, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: When Innocence Dies ~ Chapter one

    Well actually the only thing causing the mild cheesy feeling was the way you wrote your dialogue and the actions of the character in general. Darius was sort of the ...

    Jul 17, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: My Fair Lady

    Hi, nice one for your first poem xD COME UP WITH MOAR. MOOAARRR. /insanity

    Jul 17, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Mist. Mysterious. Mystical. (Chapter 1)

    Longer now, but a few points you can improve on... Tendra stood at the bedside, fully dressed. Her hair was wet from her bath and she glowed. --- If she ...

    May 11, 2008
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Mist. Mysterious. Mystical. [ignore this.]

    It's good and all, but then... There isn't much to critique on, it's too short x_x

    May 8, 2008


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