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Hi! I think this is a good, intriguing start but it needs some work. How about we go through sentence by sentence, since this is pretty short? :) The heels ...

Hi Storyweaver! I'm back for more! :) So, this is good, but still needs a little bit of work. I'm just going to go through from the beginning and nitpick ...

Hi Storyweaver! I'm just going to do a quick review on this since I didn't find many mistakes. :) This was a great prologue! It had a good hook and ...

Hello Aussie! Right off just let me say "Great job!" I just loved this. :) There really isn't too much to critique. You have good grammar, your story seems solid. ...

Hello! This is very promising for your first story. I'll try and help you make the prologue shine a little more. :) First of all, grammar. My names Emma, and ...

Umm . . . is that supposed to be an inspirational quote or a quote mocking faith? It kind of seems like the latter. So if that's what you were ...

Oooo! This is just fantastic! It gave me goose bumps. :) There were a few more nitpicks in this one than the first part, so let's get started, shall we? ...

Wow. That's really about all I can say! I loved this a lot! At first I was kind of confused by the different POV's, but by the end I liked ...

Okay. I agree with euro. This just didn't seem as good as part one. I was constantly confused with everything that was going on. You throw so much information at ...

Okay, first off can I just say your writing style is GORGEOUS!!! I loved reading this. It was amazing! :D There's just a couple things. I agree with euro. There ...

Hey Jayden! First of all, I think the idea of the story is great, but we need more clues. We need more clues as to what she would be doing ...

This is aweseome! I love findings things about faith and God on here. It reminds me that there are other people out there who still believe in these things. :D ...

Hey Jane! Here's a quick review on your prologue. :) First of all, I think this is a really cool idea! Children with the abilities of animals and a mark ...

Hey Random! Back for chapter one. :D First, some nitpicks. I’m a fourteen-year-old girl who just moved from Florida to North Dakota. I'm confused. They just moved to North Dakota, ...

Hey there Tapatia! I'm going to be doing a quick review on your piece today. First, a few nitpicks: Senior year has proven to be the most difficult yet You ...