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albedo

  • Art » Historical Fiction, Realistic Re: Prologue for a book about war.

    Hello! This seems like it would be a very interesting book but as for the prologue, there are tons of mistakes I wanna go over. "a present that did not ...

    Mar 31, 2020
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Plaything

    Hello! This story, in my opinion, is cute and I love the use of big vocabulary words, however, there are some mistakes that I would like to point out. "its ...

    Mar 30, 2020
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Narrative Re: keep me wild.

    Hello! The poem is beautiful and has a lot of large vocabulary words which I personally love. There are a few small mistakes that I would like to point out. ...

    Mar 30, 2020
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Romantic Re: Promise of Reunion

    Hello! Though there a few spelling errors I would like to go over, this is a good story. 'he thought about what his life would have been like if he ...

    Mar 30, 2020
  • Poetry » Narrative, Other Re: Pumpkin Carving

    Hello! I really liked the poem and it has a lot of potentials. 'I'm not to good in crowds Where addicts linger at the edges' The word 'to' should be ...

    Mar 30, 2020
  • Art » General, General Re: worth of words

    Hello! I really enjoyed reading your poem a lot. I love the dialogue! There are a few small mistakes that should be fixed. As I am reading the poem I ...

    Mar 30, 2020
  • Poetry » Romantic, Literature Re: The feather

    I think that this poem is great and has a lot of potentials. I don't see how anything in the poem that would label it as romantic. When the narrator ...

    Mar 30, 2020
  • Poetry » General, General Re: What Color Are the Stars?

    I apologize in advance for the really short review considering that it's a very short poem. I think this is a really great and short poem. Very straightforward, straight to ...

    Mar 30, 2020
  • Other » Realistic, General Re: Pause, Think and Rediscover

    I loved this message for 2 of many reasons. I totally understand what you are trying to convey to the reader and the advice is very considerate and realistic. I ...

    Mar 14, 2020
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: Seals of Love

    This is very well written poem. The format is simple and not too sophisticated. I really love your vocabulary and you did a nice job including big words which my ...

    Mar 14, 2020
  • Poetry » General, General Re: it feels like this

    I think the writing it beautiful and well characterized. However, I do think you should look into different writing format. It would make your writing more figurative if you edited ...

    Mar 14, 2020


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