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AN: So, this is the edited prologue and first chapter. Together, they're longer than any of the rest of the chapters in this story will be. And, yes chapter one ...

I liked this chapter too. I think I'll stick around. (; Now, this fight between Bridget, Adrian, and Maddy kind of came out of no where. People don't usually come ...

This is good! I love the plot and the big twist in the end. I believe that everyone else has already had their fun with the nitpicking, so I'll stay ...

(A.N.: I know! Its so short isn't it? Please don't hate me! Writing from Jack's PoV isn't my forte. But I'll post the next chapter soon, promise.) Jack. Four. God. ...

This story has a good plot, and I like it, but the rest of it is just too simple. You could do so much with this if you strengthened it ...

This was a really good and cute and romantic story.(: The descriptions and imagery are great. Just a few mistakes though: The vampire don't have heartbeats, so Alice's heart cannot ...

Ah, yes, my dear Cara. I wrote a poem about writing. It got in the top 20 for the 2009 Reflections Contest. The melting of the wax The flickering of ...

Hi! Well, this was a pretty good poem. Very relatable, and all that good stuff. The rhyming seems a little forced to me, some words stuck in that aren't needed. ...

Yay! Thanks, Hales. And this is still a first draft (Of the prologue). But I will edit it, eventually. Comment on that number 6.: You are too dang smart, girl! ...

AN: This was meant to be a short story, but I had a burst of enthusiasm and wrote another chapter. This is something that's been on my mind for awhile. ...

Yay! You wrote more! Kay, well, on the the reviewing/critiquing: It was an alien feeling this fear, it was not sheer terror, it did not suffocate, nor did it wholly ...

This was really good. I like it a lot. I guess I can somewhat relate. There were a few typos in there: Someone’s crying in the kitchen. No one tells ...

Ebony Three. Proud to Pathetic. I sighed as I sat there in his arms. I’d just gone from proud to pathetic in two minutes flat. So much for that attempt ...

Thanks for the reviews! And the part about where she should be more reluctant to let out her story is something she got from her rehab. She went there, didn't ...

Jack Two. Ebony’s Story. “There was once a girl who lived in the little town of Aurora, Indiana. A lot of people would call her beautiful. Of course, like most ...