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  • Novel / Chapter » Realistic, Teen Fiction Re: New Haven: Chapter 5: What Lay Behind The Doors

    I think it's good, you could possibly try not to repeat the words 'They ran through' so much. On the third paragraph from the top you could take out the ...

    Dec 15, 2015


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