almiura

Wow... That was powerful.... I think you turn this into a novel if you haven't already.. You could start out explaining all the main characters and how they play into ...

Thank you so much! I will try to remember that next time I write. Thank you for leaving a comment!

Thank you! I'll make sure to do that. I was nervous putting this on here because I feel like it wasn't very good. This story is based off of the ...

Thank you! I was nervous at first because I really don't like posting my stories... I'm just not confidant that they are any good, I'll be sure to proofread more. ...

Thank you. This is the only story that I have actually finished. I'm glad that you enjoyed it and thank you for leaving a comment.

You should change the third to last line. she smiles alone should be something a lot more dark..but thats just my opinion.