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Re: Four Girls; One Story (5)
~Chapter 5~ Landan got up from his seat and headed toward the girl he was dieing to talk to. When he sat next to her he got nervous but he ...
Aug 4, 2009 -
Re: I Promise But I Lie (2)
Ok, I thought this chapter was better. But some things you could've explained a little more cause I was a little confused who the character was and what was happening. ...
Aug 4, 2009 -
Re: I Promise, But I Lie (1)
I thought it was pretty good. But I found that she let him get away with it too easily. Personally if I was her, I would slap him and probably ...
Aug 4, 2009 -
Re: Unloveable
I thought that story was interesting. I found that it didn't explain a lot of things. I'm not quite sure what happened and it kind of just ended so it ...
Jul 30, 2009 -
Re: Let Me Love You
Hi! I liked it but it seemed a little short and you didn't put a lot of description. Also when you explained some things I got a little confused like ...
Jul 30, 2009 -
Re: Four Girls; One Story (4)
~Chapter 4~ "Guy's, it's seven o'clock so everyone should be here in about half an hour or so. I'm getting so excited!" Ali said smiling. "I know, me too! It's ...
Jul 18, 2009 -
Re: Time Dissolves Itself [1]
I loved it!! It was soo good and the way you described the feelings and everyone I loved. That's the way that I could express my feelings in writing. I ...
Jul 11, 2009 -
Re: Four Girls; One Story (3)
~Chapter 3~ Ali sat waiting in the car for Jayne and looked at the clock. She looked at the front of the school seeing if Jayne was coming. She saw ...
Jul 11, 2009 -
Re: Four Girls; One Story (Chapter 2)
~Chapter 2~ Jayne rushed in the hallway with her books so she wouldn’t be late for class. When she turned the corner of the hallway she bumped into someone with ...
Jul 5, 2009 -
Re: Four Girls; One Story (Chapter 1)
~Chapter 1~ "Alexis! What are you still doing in bed? You’re going to be late for work!" Alison said jumping on top of Alexis. "Alison, get off of me!" Alexis ...
Jul 4, 2009 -
Re: You're It (Chapter 2) *rewritten/edited*
Hi me again! I thought the same way. I found that it was going WAY to fast. I was really confused and wasn't sure what was happening. But I did ...
Jul 4, 2009 -
Re: You're It (Chapter 1) *rewritten/edited*
Hi! I really liked your story. I found it interesting to read and I didn't find any mistakes. But I do kind of find that it is a little predictable ...
Jul 4, 2009 -
Re: I'm Yours. (edited)
That was a cute story. I always love those kind of romances where two people have known each other since they were little and fall in love once they get ...
Jun 28, 2009 -
Re: Solace From The Shadows (Chapter 1)
Hi Dark Eyed Pixie! I enjoyed reading that. But I did find that there was grammar problems with the periods. And I found it a little odd that she was ...
Jun 28, 2009 -
Re: Summer Is For...
The summer is for hanging with family and friends while going camping and reading a good book outside on the hammock. :)
Jun 28, 2009
