antimelrose

Hello! I agree with the others that the meter and the choice of words is quite nice. There are one or two places that feel slightly wooden, but a little ...

This was an interesting piece of work, and my qualms about it are few. The first is just plain subjective: I don't think that "Friend" in the first stanza needs ...

Hello! This poem, overall, was decent. The first two stanzas were the weakest (in my opinion), but the latter two were much stronger. I liked the message as well as ...

This was very good. I loved all the descriptions, and you did particularly well with the lines regarding the sounds of Bedouin life. Everything was so easy and fresh to ...

Well, it's unconventional for a poem. There's a handful of rough spots, but overall I like it. The setting is interesting, and you convey the sense of urgency quite nicely. ...

All right, I'm not a huge fan of romantic poetry, so I'll be honest: this didn't particularly wow me. It had some okay moments, but the whole head–over–heels/infatuation beyond belief ...

There is a lonely quality to "hispaniola", and your interpretation of current events haunting; frangible, even. The second stanza leaves unsettling images in the mind; for me, the words "bleeding" ...

Hello! Yes, as Nate said, your choice of punctuation/font is a little messy, and it does detract a bit from an otherwise interesting poem. There are places where a comma ...

Hello Juniper! You do quite beautifully with vocabulary and descriptions. However, when it came to stitching them together for the poem, some things held together; other parts unraveled. I love ...

Your use of language in this comes across as very well written, and the poem was engaging to read. Best of all, it didn't have a quality of being trite, ...

Well, it has some good moments, but overall the way you constructed the sentences (in order to fulfill the rhyme) sometimes makes for a jolting effect. It would be good ...

There was a sparse quality to it that I liked. Yes, the final stanza kind of tilted the whole thing on a slightly unflattering angle...but the lines I really enjoyed ...

Every time I see your name next to a work, I find myself afraid to click– what did the genius write this time? And I have never been disappointed. This ...

Hello! Here's another review to add to your collection. "Death Clock" provided an interesting, if morbid read. The way you wrote it left some mystery to the reader: How could ...

Hello! Thanks for sharing this with us. First off, the only grammatical misstep I see so far is the one in the second stanza where you seemed to have forgotten ...