appleseed

'But it cant be,I just met her!" I gasped to him self. That doesn't make sense to me. Also, I think the way you wrote it is really cool, but, ...

It was pretty good. But it definitely needs some dialogue.

All of the grammar things were taken care of by the other critiques. Overall it is a very great story so far and i like the idea, but i agree ...

I think that the whole color thing is a really cool idea. The story is also very heartfelt. There are a few grammatical errors but i think the other replies ...

Not wind up common and really bored. That line sounds kind of awkward. But everything else sounds great! I like the title and basic idea a lot.

This is amazing. I wish I could draw like this. Mine never end up coming out like this.

Three O’clock in the afternoon, I scuffed my feet along the cold cement trailing a good three yards behind my parents and my twin. I pictured how many people’s footprints ...