ashleylee

Okay, I fixed it up. I even changed the whole "house welcoming her home" thing :wink: I still need help with the part about showing what she's like on a ...

umm, are you going to continue this or is that the ending? because i don't know if i'm satisfied with that being it. i really liked the whole idea of ...

this story just keeps my attention the whole way through! you should really consider stretching the story out to a longer version.

wow, i really liked this one. the irony of the whole thing was great! :) wonderful job! now i'll have to read lily of my heart 2 and 3!

wow, that was a pretty dramatic piece. it kind of went too fast for me though. How one moment he was hurt because she liked someone else and then the ...

this one was a little confusing in the beginning but the ending was good. how the girl forgave him even though what he was doing was horribly wrong. as an ...

i liked reading this! it gave you a sense of what was going on in a dogs mind! and the part about the snooty cat who doesn't enjoy her masters ...

this was i was able to imagine the images you were creating. but i have the same question as inkling...was she pretending to fall or really was?? not a big ...

this one is pretty good. i like the very ending line. "when chaos erupts."

i really like this poem. you can definitely feel the emotion from that. that was powerful! good work!