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  • Novel / Chapter » Horror, Health Re: Mirage

    This was a very good piece, you really demonstrated who white haunts the main character, and I liked that. You gave good examples of white being everywhere, and I loved ...

    Mar 30, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Supernatural Re: The Year of the Scorpio - Prologue

    This was a really good prologue, I mean, I loved it. The only thing I must say is that maybe you could try to slow the info-dump. I mean, we ...

    Mar 28, 2013
  • Poetry » Horror, Mystery / Suspense Re: For When The Sun is Down, He comes to play.

    I really liked the message of this poem, and I liked how you used figurative language to describe depression. The one thing I will comment on is how it is ...

    Mar 27, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Mystery / Suspense Re: Clocks.

    Hi ScandalousPhoenix! Okay to ze review... This poem was pretty abstract, and I'm pretty sure that was the whole point when writing it. It was very creative, though I think ...

    Mar 27, 2013
  • Poetry » Spiritual, Realistic Re: Bad Luck

    This poem was extremely thoughtful and I really enjoyed it. I mean, seriously, it was REALLY good. The only critique(if you could call it that)is that you could try to ...

    Mar 27, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Chapter 1: Silence and snow

    I was enthralled with your story, though there were a few things that made it a bit hard to read. For example, it seemed like we needed a bit more ...

    Mar 25, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Narrative Re: When you...

    I really enjoyed this poem, it really gave you the feeling that I came from the heart. It seems like you really out thought in this poem, and that's important ...

    Mar 25, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Taken down for editing!

    Alright... First things first, this was absolutely AMAZING!!!!!!! I was totally drawn into Claude and Matthew's personalities and the story was written extremely well, with enough cliff hangers to kee

    Mar 20, 2013
  • Lyrics » Lyrical, Realistic Re: Here For You

    That was a really beautiful song for a friend, I enjoyed reading it. You definitely have a gift in songwriting. One thing I will critique on is some repetition that ...

    Mar 16, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Romantic Re: The Dream Princess- Chapter 1

    I am impressed. It was really a perfect start for a novel, with cliff hangers and things unexplained. You always want to have mysteries in your book to keep the ...

    Mar 16, 2013
  • Lyrics » Realistic, Fantasy Re: Grr can't think of a title

    It is a very good idea for a song though I think a few words might be repeated a bit too much. I know it might be for emphasis, but ...

    Jan 7, 2013


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