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this poem is soo cool! i don't think there is anything quite wrong with the perfectly portrays that sense of frenzy the way it is.. fantastic one dude! ;)

there were a little typing mistakes..if you could just read it over. You gave reasons, but aren't they too trivial for somebody to kill her sister? it makes the story ...

the story is very sweet and touching. you made a few mistakes with the tenses, but the story was good overall. As I lay tonight, I cannot help but think ...

your post is fantastic! i loved it. the language you used is pretty captivating, just the kind you get to read in books such as Eragon. there was a little ...

So finally, you posted its next chapter. There was just one odd line I found- I fell asleep in his arms; wishing being with John was half as good as ...

Hey, your poem was superb! I loved it! I found an error: Each melody told us something new, Preparing us for stories which we never knew , I have written ...

OK, I am going to write in bold whatever I found was an error. Selcky Coydaiy awoke on Sunday September 10 2008, it was pray day as she called it, ...

The poem was really sweet. But, there were a few errors... Love - what does it mean? She is ever such a fickel mistress . Her eyes...one minute an inviting ...

Superb! The poem is very good. But, I really couldn't figure out the second stanza. What really happened? Was there was some war going on? I remember the blood spilling ...

Hi, this really is the start of an excellent story. there was just ONE mistake I found in the chapter: I had never been the one to cry over anything. ...

Okay,this is surely a very cool story. You started off well, the content was excellent, but the ending was a little too quick. One moment Goode is smiling and the ...

Hi Your story is becoming more and more interesting day by day. I loved this chapter! I have just one question: In the last chapter you had mentioned that Sabrina’s ...

Hi! Even I have grown up with this slogan- 'UNITY IN DIVERSITY'. And what you've written is very true. It is so wrong to discriminate people on the basis of ...

I now feel that the story is picking up. It a very, very interesting. The only thing i found odd was the modern lifestyle of Sabrina in the medieval times ...

I liked your poem. It was really good.But I lost the track of the poem a bit and it became a little confusing for me. I have a question. Why ...