beginningtowrite

Thanks so much for your advice! I was actually considering doing an introduction/prologue but I couldn't figure out how to start it, so any suggestions there would be greatly appreciated ...

Just a quick thing i noticed: The iron barred doors clanked shut, and the guard told me I would not be receiving any rations for the next two days for ...

I'm sorry it wasn't intended that way! I was only harsh because I think that this story has loads of potential and I really enjoyed reading it! I can't wait ...

This is absolutely amazing! One thing though: She quickly step sided them and sent her own attack back. I don't know whether you wrote it like this because of where ...

Ooh, I will have to read that now! Hopefully it is as good as this one (:

This is an amazing first chapter! I loved how descriptive it was and I couldn't stop reading it! I can't wait to read the rest, keep up the great work ...

Haha so do I, they're like my best friend xD But yeah, I can't wait to read the rest of this! :D

I know this is just a prologue, but I think some touching up could be done. Don't get me wrong, it was interesting and I will enjoy reading the rest ...

This was amazing, it was right out there when it comes to fantasy. My only criticism is that in the first couple of paragraphs I think you may have over-used ...

This sounds like a great idea! One section that confused me a slight bit though was: After a year of that terrible night , her stepfather decides to move the ...

Thanks for that (: And yes I realised as soon as I had posted it how confusing it was, even for me haha. Thanks for the kind words and suggestions ...

This was amazing! I am also aiming to write a story about fallen angels, although mine is different. I love the fact that already this has left me wanting to ...

"Ellie," I could hear my friend say, but it sounded distant, "ELLIE!" She waved her hand in front of my face, breaking the trance I was in. "What?" I snapped ...