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bkwrm

  • Other Poetry Re: Arisen

    Short but powerful. Well done for a well constructed poem :) But I've began again. --- Or let the evil in? again and in don't rhyme and in the UK ...

    Jun 26, 2008
  • Other Poetry Re: Vengeance

    I can't say that I agree with the feelings expressed in this poem, but it was well written and it flows well. Pieces such as this seem to be your ...

    Jun 26, 2008
  • Fantasy Novels Re: The Three Queens - Chapter Three

    The Three Queens *Sorry about the weird formatting - I can't seem to make it clear where my paragraphs are and where I've just separated speech from the rest of ...

    Jun 25, 2008
  • Other Poetry Re: Way Back Home

    I liked this a lot - it was very poignant, even though you kept it brief. All the words/phrases seemed well chosen and it worked well. There's nothing more to ...

    Jun 25, 2008
  • Other Poetry Re: The Party Goes On

    This is okay - but I must admit that I'm not really sure what you actually mean at the end with your reference to dead parents. Am I missing something ...

    Jun 25, 2008
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Anyplace but here

    This poem is good and it's also very potent. There's just one thing that confuses me a little. You switch tenses part way through a sentence;- I fall, he won. ...

    Jun 1, 2008
  • Romantic Novels Re: Garden of Hideous - Chap. 1

    I like this story a lot so far and there isn't really anything wrong with it, so I'm going to be really mean and pick up on every tiny little ...

    May 30, 2008
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Chapter 1, The Duty {Being Edited}

    This is alright but I find one thing a little strange - why doesn't she feel some sort of affinity for the amulet when she first has it, instead of ...

    May 8, 2008
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Dawning

    The rhyming isn'y great, but wow! What a fantastic way you have with words. Gold star for you :D Keep writing, Bkwrm

    May 1, 2008
  • Lyric Poetry Re: A Holocaust Requiem

    This was okay - but I agree with Vernon that you should cut the last parts. Also I must say that your poem doesn't really make your reader feel at ...

    May 1, 2008
  • Lyrics Re: Smile (I Am Leaving)

    I liked this - it's definitely radio material. Now I know that as it's a rap it's not supposed to be grammatically correct or anything, but there's one thing that ...

    May 1, 2008
  • General Fiction Novels Re: (RUNAWAY) Chapter One: Paralyzed * title subject to change

    I love part two :D I think the MSN thing is great - and their disscussion gives you a much better idea of their friendship. Plus I'm definately going with ...

    Apr 25, 2008
  • General Fiction Novels Re: (RUNAWAY) Chapter One: Paralyzed * title subject to change

    1. I think that Skye seems to be a fairly rebellious teenager, but I'd hazard a guess that she's also a little bit of a geek at heart - and ...

    Apr 21, 2008
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Lost in Freedom

    I don't get the title... maybe that's just me though. Anyway it's a great piece, but I do agree that splitting it up would work better. Also, I've always been ...

    Apr 21, 2008
  • Official Polls Re: Another poll for school

    I love English as a subject. That said, I hate my teacher. Also, I adore French - it just sounds soo good! :D Bkwrm

    Apr 21, 2008


“Rise like Lions after slumber In unvanquishable number. Shake your chains to earth like dew Which in sleep had fallen on you— Ye are many—they are few.”
— Mary Shelly