bluewaterlily

Bluewaterlily at your service for a review. Red=corrections Green=how I would have written it Dear reader, My name will stay unknown to you. I will trust you are a good ...

For some reason I write in present tense. It gives you a sense of being in the story right now, like cassie17 said. Though a writing book said that most ...

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It looks good. I can`t wait to read the story with the soldier in it. By the way, is that a medieval soldier?

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The way you described their love for each other was so real, especially for a short story. Just imagine what you could do with a romance novel! I can`t wait ...

Great story! I love the way you the characters so the readers can visualize them clearly, and how you vividly describe their relationship. The dialogue is also good. Though I`d ...

Great story! There are a few suggestions I would like to make. For example the second sentence in the first paragraph would be better if you combined the second sentence ...