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  • Dramatic Poetry Re: I Miss You

    I don't like this poem at all and it only took me maybe a minute to make: I miss you. I hate how it’s true. I love you. The words ...

    Feb 23, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: My Song

    I like it, I can just picture like a fairy or some beautiful elf dancing in the forest with only the moon as her light. It's really a beautiful poem, ...

    Feb 23, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Global Disaster

    I agree, that it does have some errors, but I really love it! It's good and something I agree with totally. Really, it's awesome. Just do a little editing and ...

    Feb 23, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Mr.Silence Must Die

    I really like it, it has some errors, and I'm not sure I like the rhythm, but I like it. If you just fixed the grammatical errors, I would love ...

    Feb 23, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Curtains

    I'm really not sure what to say to this. It has a good idea, but it needs a lot of work. Your structure needs work, and some different word choices ...

    Feb 23, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Me and You...

    I really like this poem, especially the last stanza. It's good, but you really should keep the rhyming thing through out the whole poem, and not just a few stanzas. ...

    Feb 21, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: No Other Man

    Thanks everyone! And for the advice, thank you. I did change "say" to "heard" though, thank you again!

    Feb 21, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Silent Sentinel

    Thanks Annie! I really appreciate it, this poem means a lot to me, so thank you for liking it.

    Feb 21, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: The Screams

    Thanks! I wasn't sure about this poem, but I'm glad you guys liked it. I only liked it, because it was something I really felt, and am just now getting ...

    Feb 21, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Finally

    Thanks everbody! I loved writing this poem, afterwards, I felt so good. This poem, I wrote really did happen to me. A man I had fallen in love with (and ...

    Feb 21, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Love Poem(s) [WIP]

    I like this too: "Despite this radiant beauty,/All pales compared to you." They do need some work, but good job at the rhyming. Try something a little different, a different ...

    Feb 16, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Mystery Man

    I like it, but I do agree the last line isn't that good, but it could be. Just change it a bit.

    Feb 16, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: This Valentine

    I really like it, but you do have some spelling errors which really bug me, so please just fix that and it'd be fine. Other than that, I liked it. ...

    Feb 14, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Let me forget

    I liked it and can understand where you're coming from. I'm also in a long distance relationship and now he's in jail, so it's even harder. One tip though, try ...

    Feb 14, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Lost without you

    I loved it! It was freakin' awesome! Really good with some attitude, and it was something I could really relate too. REALLY relate, haha, I never break up wit people, ...

    Feb 14, 2011


Follow your passion, stay true to yourself, never follow someone else’s path unless you’re in the woods and you’re lost and you see a path then by all means you should follow that.
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