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Hm. Well, it was OK, but to be honest it left me kind of cold. I think part of the problem is that each of the lines you've used (with ...

I agree, this is a very powerful poem; but there are some ways I think you could improve it. Firstly, punctuation. You don't really have much punctuation throughout and that ...

I agree - this was quite a powerful poem, and well-executed. Part of me always rebels when I see "message" poetry, but I do think you've captured the whole tone ...

Hi again Ayra! This is definitely one of your better pieces, I think -- you can definitely tell there's a lot of feeling involved, and I really love the image ...

While I appreciate the sentiment behind it, the poem itself is too bald for my taste. It asks a question, then answers itself, and one is left wondering what the ...

J C Belding; While I appreciate the sentiment behind it, the poem itself is too bald for my taste.

6/10 Pretty colours, but animated avatars drive me nuts, somehow.

I ... just lost all faith in humanity -.- And Sumi: your avatar is hypnotizing me o_0

6/10 Interesting, but I felt like I was missing part of the conversation or whatever XD

5/10 I...whut?

When it comes to receiving critiques, I don't even look at the age - I just read the crit and do like St. R. said. I make corrections as I ...

7/10 because I've heard the first part before, but the additions are funny XD

Opening credits: Sogno (I Dream) - Andrea Bocelli First Date: La Escalier - Moulin Rouge soundtrack Falling In Love: Time To Say Goodbye - Andrea Bocelli Love Scene: Homeward Bound ...

Wow. That definitely packs quite a punch. I love the voice here, and your rhythm really picks up from the second stanza onwards. It's great to see such an important ...

Honestly? I liked it - the image was quite vivid and I felt the structure very balanced. There were a couple of things that bugged me, though. Firstly, you repeat ...